ive been playing this game for a few days and since have forgotten to comment SO IM DOING IT NOW!!! BUTTT I REALLY LOVED THE STORY, it was so engaging and heartwrenching to see what the mc had to go through </3 but despite that, i cant find myself hating any of the characters and i really love how they're all written!! i find myself empathizing with a lot of them at different moments (though i am catching vincent outside one of these days)!
THANK YOU FOR THE HARD WORK!!! i really love the premise and the writing, its really really immersive!! im excited to see what comes next!! i am gnawing at the bars of my cell once again
It's alright. I just wasn't sure! Didn't want to accept something that could have been intended not for me 😹 would've been awkward
Thank you for writing a comment and sharing your feelings and for your kind words 💛🥹 I appreciate it a lot, and I'm very happy you're enjoying my story!! I can't wait to show you more; hopefully I'll finish the next chapter v soon.
(If you think that what the MC had to go through was heart-wrenching, I have bad news for you 🤭)
I completely forgot to comment when I first made my account, (this is my fourth ever comment btw ;) ) but I LOVE this story, I relate a lot with the mc, partly because I make the choices so I'm, like, kinda the mc, but mainly because I also have paranoia in real life (nothing serious don't worry, it doesn't affect my life too much) and it's the first time I have seen a main character with paranoia. Lovely keep up the good work, words cannot describe how excited I am for the next chapter, I hope you have a lovely time doing whatever you're doing right now and find success in writing, especially if you continue writing IF which I will try my best to read. Lots of love. Live well and be happy. lots of love
Thank you for leaving a comment and for your kind words 🥹💛🫂 I'm happy you're enjoying the story! The next chapter is almost done, so hopefully I'll be able to show it to you soon :)
Why would you even CONSIDER allowing them to trap you in that place? Freedom is worth more than all the protection in the world. Better to risk death than being locked in a cage, however gilded.
You'd be a million times safer if it became known that nothing anyone did to you could possibly make you help them, unless you -wanted- to help them of your own free will. (I realize that proving it would be an unpleasant experience, but in the long run you'll either be dead or free from other people attempting to force you, and both options are better than the alternative.)
It's REALLY irritating that I can't choose to just leave --or at the very least attempt it.
Even if it means meeting a bad end.
(Of course, if the mc had been smart they wouldn't have revealed their powers to begin with, to anyone. But what's done is done.)
And it's impressive how many ways you find to say "Yes". It's almost as if you wanted the reader to think they have a choice when in fact they have no choice at all. >_>
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The story itself is very good, and well-written too.
But I feel like you can't make a SINGLE choice yourself. (Not counting love interests here.)
Even when someone in the game ask you if you want to do this or not, there's no choice at all --you end up doing it.
At most you can pick one of ten ways to say yes. >_>
I also notice that there is no route you can choose to not have a love interest focus.
And instead of actually having several encounters that determine your relationship to someone, you can choose first who, then whether it's platonic or romantic.
As far as I can tell, it doesn't matter if you try to ignore them (and if it had been possible to insult them, that too) or whatever you choose otherwise; Everything is determined by those two choices, and NOTHING else.
That's what it appears like to me, so please tell me if I'm wrong.
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Overall this game has a very interesting and well-written story.
But it is EXTREMELY frustrating to have NO choice at all!
Ultimately, this is story about romance and/or friendship, and that's what I'm interested in writing. That's why you have to choose a route and decide whether you want to befriend or romance the character—that's is the design and the purpose of the story. If this isn't you cup of tea, then it's best to read something else. There are many stories, and I'm sure you'll find something you'll like. I'm satisfied with how the story is written—it's exactly as I wanted it to be. I'm not trying to write everything that is possible to write or make a story for everyone, so I won't be changing anything.
The story has to go in a specific direction because I have a plot in mind and I can't let the main character wander willy-nilly. I need them to take particular steps to get to a specific point, which is why the MC has to do plenty of things that you as a reader might disagree with or dislike. They're not a self-insert either; they're their own character, with their priorities, fears, desires, etc., which affect how they act.
There will be choices that impact how their story progresses. I agree that so far they've been limited—and I'm fine with that. I already have to keep in mind a lot of things because I'm writing five different routes alongside the main story—and it'll become more complicated once the readers make a very important choice in Chapter 7, which will change the flavor of relationships and endings tremendously. Adding more choices that would add more branches that lead nowhere is not one of my goals for this project, especially considering this is my first IF and I don't want to make my job harder than necessary by biting more than I can chew.
About two choices to decide your route—that was purposeful. It's a system I prefer when I'm playing other games/stories, so I wrote it like this.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts 💛 I appreciate you taking your time to read my story and write a comment. I don't intend to change your mind on anything or influence how you view TAS. Just wanted to reply to some things you wrote :)
Maybe in April, but that's a very tentative date. The chapter is quite big due to all the routes, so even though I'm pushing 50K words, I'm only barely reaching the middle of the chapter's plan. But there's a lot of tasty things happening, so I hope it'll be worth the wait for you 💛
10/10 this is such an amazing read! Its so well written and super immersive. Ive already played threw 2 routes and am going back for the rest! I can't wait for the next update
my heart everytime Ash is mentioned I am so weak and soft please T-T their romance is everything I want in a real relationship just raw and tender to have them see you know you and still want you even though you think/know your lacking I kind of feel like the spider man meme whenever they put themselves down too like um so much in common but dont do that please that hurts
As someone who wanted to romance Az at first but somehow ended up romancing The heir (O) Let me just say that i love it. I'll probably (Not probably Because i am going to do it) replay the game and romance everyone in different saves because all the characters are well written and the plot?! And even tho i wasn't romancing Ash let me just say they they are so sweet and I'm not even on their route ToT and Az is funny but who knows what they hide behind it? So yeah i pretty much want to try every route and can't wait for the next chapter (i can but yk ┐(^ ^)┌ )
This is so good. Just played through all five chapters in one sitting and starting another playthrough. The characters are awesome. Love Vez. Can't wait to read more.
Hi! This was a wonderful read and I can't wait to see what comes next. I love how much the narration is influenced by the Oracle's POV - the constant doubting, spiraling and self-loathing that bubbles up at the slightest trigger. Vez and Ash are so sweet and so genuine and yet my Oracle can't stop questioning their intentions, self-sabotaging, drawing themselves away for fear of hurt, that their touch will burn. I like POVs like this one and I love how it affects the relationships therein and I love how you've written it.
Kudos and best of luck with your further plans! <3
Thank you for your kind words and for sharing your thoughts!! 🥹💛 The Oracle is slightly paranoid, so I'm glad that it reads properly. They'll eventually gather the courage to hold on to someone.
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ive been playing this game for a few days and since have forgotten to comment SO IM DOING IT NOW!!! BUTTT I REALLY LOVED THE STORY, it was so engaging and heartwrenching to see what the mc had to go through </3 but despite that, i cant find myself hating any of the characters and i really love how they're all written!! i find myself empathizing with a lot of them at different moments (though i am catching vincent outside one of these days)!
THANK YOU FOR THE HARD WORK!!! i really love the premise and the writing, its really really immersive!! im excited to see what comes next!! i am gnawing at the bars of my cell once again
I have a feeling this comment wasn't meant for my story? Unless you wanted to write another character's name but wrote Vincent 😅
i think they meant Vez but autocorrect said ''Fuck you'' LMAO
i only realized this after i typed it IM SAWRYYY it was like 3 am i wa s so confsued BUT IT STILL APPLIES!!!!!
It's alright. I just wasn't sure! Didn't want to accept something that could have been intended not for me 😹 would've been awkward
Thank you for writing a comment and sharing your feelings and for your kind words 💛🥹 I appreciate it a lot, and I'm very happy you're enjoying my story!! I can't wait to show you more; hopefully I'll finish the next chapter v soon.
(If you think that what the MC had to go through was heart-wrenching, I have bad news for you 🤭)
I completely forgot to comment when I first made my account, (this is my fourth ever comment btw ;) ) but I LOVE this story, I relate a lot with the mc, partly because I make the choices so I'm, like, kinda the mc, but mainly because I also have paranoia in real life (nothing serious don't worry, it doesn't affect my life too much) and it's the first time I have seen a main character with paranoia. Lovely keep up the good work, words cannot describe how excited I am for the next chapter, I hope you have a lovely time doing whatever you're doing right now and find success in writing, especially if you continue writing IF which I will try my best to read. Lots of love. Live well and be happy. lots of love
Thank you for leaving a comment and for your kind words 🥹💛🫂 I'm happy you're enjoying the story! The next chapter is almost done, so hopefully I'll be able to show it to you soon :)
Thanks a lot mate, I'm REAAAAAAAALLY excited for it!!!!
I enjoyed this a lot!! I love the unique setting and the story! Can't wait for more but in the mean time I'm gonna play again lol
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Thank you!! I'm very happy you liked it! I'm close to finishing the next chapter, and I can't wait to show it to you too 💛
Why would you even CONSIDER allowing them to trap you in that place?
Freedom is worth more than all the protection in the world.
Better to risk death than being locked in a cage, however gilded.
You'd be a million times safer if it became known that nothing anyone did to you could possibly make you help them, unless you -wanted- to help them of your own free will.
(I realize that proving it would be an unpleasant experience, but in the long run you'll either be dead or free from other people attempting to force you, and both options are better than the alternative.)
It's REALLY irritating that I can't choose to just leave --or at the very least attempt it.
Even if it means meeting a bad end.
(Of course, if the mc had been smart they wouldn't have revealed their powers to begin with, to anyone. But what's done is done.)
And it's impressive how many ways you find to say "Yes".
It's almost as if you wanted the reader to think they have a choice when in fact they have no choice at all. >_>
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The story itself is very good, and well-written too.
But I feel like you can't make a SINGLE choice yourself.
(Not counting love interests here.)
Even when someone in the game ask you if you want to do this or not, there's no choice at all --you end up doing it.
At most you can pick one of ten ways to say yes. >_>
I also notice that there is no route you can choose to not have a love interest focus.
And instead of actually having several encounters that determine your relationship to someone, you can choose first who, then whether it's platonic or romantic.
As far as I can tell, it doesn't matter if you try to ignore them (and if it had been possible to insult them, that too) or whatever you choose otherwise; Everything is determined by those two choices, and NOTHING else.
That's what it appears like to me, so please tell me if I'm wrong.
-
Overall this game has a very interesting and well-written story.
But it is EXTREMELY frustrating to have NO choice at all!
Ultimately, this is story about romance and/or friendship, and that's what I'm interested in writing. That's why you have to choose a route and decide whether you want to befriend or romance the character—that's is the design and the purpose of the story. If this isn't you cup of tea, then it's best to read something else. There are many stories, and I'm sure you'll find something you'll like. I'm satisfied with how the story is written—it's exactly as I wanted it to be. I'm not trying to write everything that is possible to write or make a story for everyone, so I won't be changing anything.
The story has to go in a specific direction because I have a plot in mind and I can't let the main character wander willy-nilly. I need them to take particular steps to get to a specific point, which is why the MC has to do plenty of things that you as a reader might disagree with or dislike. They're not a self-insert either; they're their own character, with their priorities, fears, desires, etc., which affect how they act.
There will be choices that impact how their story progresses. I agree that so far they've been limited—and I'm fine with that. I already have to keep in mind a lot of things because I'm writing five different routes alongside the main story—and it'll become more complicated once the readers make a very important choice in Chapter 7, which will change the flavor of relationships and endings tremendously. Adding more choices that would add more branches that lead nowhere is not one of my goals for this project, especially considering this is my first IF and I don't want to make my job harder than necessary by biting more than I can chew.
About two choices to decide your route—that was purposeful. It's a system I prefer when I'm playing other games/stories, so I wrote it like this.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts 💛 I appreciate you taking your time to read my story and write a comment. I don't intend to change your mind on anything or influence how you view TAS. Just wanted to reply to some things you wrote :)
my dumbass is trying to calculate when the next chapter might be coming out someone needs to drag me away from is IF💔
Maybe in April, but that's a very tentative date. The chapter is quite big due to all the routes, so even though I'm pushing 50K words, I'm only barely reaching the middle of the chapter's plan. But there's a lot of tasty things happening, so I hope it'll be worth the wait for you 💛
ofc it will!! this IF is amazing im so excited for the next chapter
i love this IF so much Im literally foaming at the mouth, eating my walls and climbing on my ceiling 😻
This is the second IF ive played where i love all of the ROs( God cursed by lunan is the other) Though L and ash have me feral (Respectfully)
cant wait for more updates! (though obviously no rush :3 )
Omg!! Thank you 🥹💛 I'm very happy to hear that
The update is being worked on every day 💪
cannot wait! in the meantime ill be playing this over and over again because you very much cursed this to be so good 🙏
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10/10 this is such an amazing read! Its so well written and super immersive. Ive already played threw 2 routes and am going back for the rest! I can't wait for the next update
Thank you so much for your kind words 🥺💛 I'm glad you're enjoying the story and the routes!
my heart everytime Ash is mentioned I am so weak and soft please T-T their romance is everything I want in a real relationship just raw and tender to have them see you know you and still want you even though you think/know your lacking I kind of feel like the spider man meme whenever they put themselves down too like um so much in common but dont do that please that hurts
I'm happy you like them so much!💛 You got their dynamic right. But don't worry; the Oracle will be here to uplift them too 🫶
glad to hear it Ash deserves everything T-T
excited for update! especially for lazarus!!
I'm working on it!💪Glad you're waiting for them 🫶
As someone who wanted to romance Az at first but somehow ended up romancing The heir (O) Let me just say that i love it. I'll probably (Not probably Because i am going to do it) replay the game and romance everyone in different saves because all the characters are well written and the plot?! And even tho i wasn't romancing Ash let me just say they they are so sweet and I'm not even on their route ToT and Az is funny but who knows what they hide behind it? So yeah i pretty much want to try every route and can't wait for the next chapter (i can but yk ┐(^ ^)┌ )
I'm glad you're enjoying the story and would even play through the other routes! Thank you for your kind words 💛💛
This is so good. Just played through all five chapters in one sitting and starting another playthrough. The characters are awesome. Love Vez. Can't wait to read more.
Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying the story 💛 💛
Hi! This was a wonderful read and I can't wait to see what comes next. I love how much the narration is influenced by the Oracle's POV - the constant doubting, spiraling and self-loathing that bubbles up at the slightest trigger. Vez and Ash are so sweet and so genuine and yet my Oracle can't stop questioning their intentions, self-sabotaging, drawing themselves away for fear of hurt, that their touch will burn. I like POVs like this one and I love how it affects the relationships therein and I love how you've written it.
Kudos and best of luck with your further plans! <3
Thank you for your kind words and for sharing your thoughts!! 🥹💛 The Oracle is slightly paranoid, so I'm glad that it reads properly. They'll eventually gather the courage to hold on to someone.